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melluransa) wrote2012-04-06 11:16 pm
melluransa) wrote2012-04-06 11:16 pm
Analysis of a short story called "Bill in a Bucket"
For an assignment for school in which we have to analyze a story and its elements, I wrote a little tidbit about Bill and Tom, and analyzed it. More goes into a story episode than you think! You have to have certain story grammar elements for a story to be considered complete, and you have to add even more (we call it "story sparkle") to make your story interesting. There are a set of rules to follow. Children with language impairments who talk so normally you wouldn't suspect a thing struggle greatly with generating stories.
SO on to the juicy stuff. My little story, inspired by a doodle of mine. This story is called, "Bill in a Bucket."
I'm going to tell a story about how you can find friends in the strangest of places.(abstract/priming)
Once upon a time, (introducer) there was a little man named Bill. He lived in a bucket. (setting) He was rather small, and his bucket was the size of a thimble. He liked where he lived. (personality) It was peaceful and cozy in his bucket.
A boy named Tom, a tall human boy (setting), stumbled upon the thimble-sized piece real estate containing Bill. He saw it glinting in the window of the old antique shop, and was immediately taken by the thimble-bucket's charm. (initiating event) He was even more surprised (internal state) to find a tiny little man sleeping within. (internal response T)
Tom bought the little man and his little home, and settled on a park bench outside the store. (setting) He gently cradled the thimble in his wide hands, and whispered, "Hello? Is there a little man in there?" (dialogue)
Bill stirred and woke up, blinking. The world was very bright looking and Bill desired nothing more but to curl up and go back to sleep. (internal response B) His stomach betrayed him however, grumbling its empty discontent. (initiating event B) It reached Tom's ears, sounding like the buzzing of a fly.
"Are you hungry?" asked Tom. (internal plan T, dialogue)
Bill turned his little face to the giant brown eye peeking down at him, nodding. "I'm so hungry I could eat a horse," Bill squeaked. (figurative language, dialogue)
Tom searched his pockets and was thankful for his sweet tooth, and for his forgetfulness (personality) -- there was a package of gummibears. He plucked out a cherry one, and dangled it enticingly at the edge of the thimble. (attempt T1)
Bill watched it, entranced. (internal state) It looked like the most delicious thing he'd ever seen, and he was ever so hungry. (internal plan B) Bill stood up, little joints creaking, and leapt for the gummy treat. (attempt B)
Tom held the gummibear up to eye level, utterly pleased (internal state) to see a little man embracing the gummibear's body while attacking what he could reach with his mouth. (consequence B, consequence T) Tom smiled, and Bill smiled back, cheeks smeared with red sticky gummibear guts. (reaction B, reaction T, internal state B, internal state T)
Tom was excited to discover what else his new little friend would eat. (reaction T2, internal state) Tom had a lot more kinds of food at home that his new little friend could try (internal plan T2) Tom ripped the head off the gummibear and dropped it in the thimble. (attempt T2) Bill dove in after it, (consequence T2) and Tom happily pocketed the thimble. (reaction T2)
And so, next time you peruse an antique store -- or any walk of life (figurative language) for that matter -- look closely, because you may find a little friend in a little place. (ender, coda/moral)
-----This story contains complete story grammar episodes. This story contains multiple complete episodes and multiple attempts. This story also contains interactive episodes because each character has separate goals and actions that influence each other.
-----This story contains a theme (little), repetition of the theme for effect, and dialogue
-----This story contains tier 2 vocabulary words which are underlined, and interesting modifier words
SO on to the juicy stuff. My little story, inspired by a doodle of mine. This story is called, "Bill in a Bucket."
I'm going to tell a story about how you can find friends in the strangest of places.(abstract/priming)
Once upon a time, (introducer) there was a little man named Bill. He lived in a bucket. (setting) He was rather small, and his bucket was the size of a thimble. He liked where he lived. (personality) It was peaceful and cozy in his bucket.
A boy named Tom, a tall human boy (setting), stumbled upon the thimble-sized piece real estate containing Bill. He saw it glinting in the window of the old antique shop, and was immediately taken by the thimble-bucket's charm. (initiating event) He was even more surprised (internal state) to find a tiny little man sleeping within. (internal response T)
Tom bought the little man and his little home, and settled on a park bench outside the store. (setting) He gently cradled the thimble in his wide hands, and whispered, "Hello? Is there a little man in there?" (dialogue)
Bill stirred and woke up, blinking. The world was very bright looking and Bill desired nothing more but to curl up and go back to sleep. (internal response B) His stomach betrayed him however, grumbling its empty discontent. (initiating event B) It reached Tom's ears, sounding like the buzzing of a fly.
"Are you hungry?" asked Tom. (internal plan T, dialogue)
Bill turned his little face to the giant brown eye peeking down at him, nodding. "I'm so hungry I could eat a horse," Bill squeaked. (figurative language, dialogue)
Tom searched his pockets and was thankful for his sweet tooth, and for his forgetfulness (personality) -- there was a package of gummibears. He plucked out a cherry one, and dangled it enticingly at the edge of the thimble. (attempt T1)
Bill watched it, entranced. (internal state) It looked like the most delicious thing he'd ever seen, and he was ever so hungry. (internal plan B) Bill stood up, little joints creaking, and leapt for the gummy treat. (attempt B)
Tom held the gummibear up to eye level, utterly pleased (internal state) to see a little man embracing the gummibear's body while attacking what he could reach with his mouth. (consequence B, consequence T) Tom smiled, and Bill smiled back, cheeks smeared with red sticky gummibear guts. (reaction B, reaction T, internal state B, internal state T)
Tom was excited to discover what else his new little friend would eat. (reaction T2, internal state) Tom had a lot more kinds of food at home that his new little friend could try (internal plan T2) Tom ripped the head off the gummibear and dropped it in the thimble. (attempt T2) Bill dove in after it, (consequence T2) and Tom happily pocketed the thimble. (reaction T2)
And so, next time you peruse an antique store -- or any walk of life (figurative language) for that matter -- look closely, because you may find a little friend in a little place. (ender, coda/moral)
-----This story contains complete story grammar episodes. This story contains multiple complete episodes and multiple attempts. This story also contains interactive episodes because each character has separate goals and actions that influence each other.
-----This story contains a theme (little), repetition of the theme for effect, and dialogue
-----This story contains tier 2 vocabulary words which are underlined, and interesting modifier words
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You did a great job with the little story and the analysis. I hope you get a great grade for it. Plus, the doodle is precious. <3
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Thanks! I'm hoping so. This is an effective way to make us learn, by making us do it. I could totally evaluate some little kid's story and use it to help me determine if he has a language disorder.
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Was interesting to see the buildup of a story to!
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This was such a sweet story! And it was interesting and clever how you analysed it.
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